>>247352>all the pieces arrive late in the story so don't expect to solve the mystery right away
Yeah, I was kind of writing off the cuff due to the nature of NaNoWriMo so I didn't really plan it out. I'm actually reworking the story a bit for the VN, I'll probably drop a couple of clues in a little sooner, add some scenes, and tighten up the narrative a bit. There's a few details that on revisiting it don't make a ton of sense so I might change small elements of it.
>you won't have any branching paths will you?
Haven't decided yet. It's occurred to me that it might be fun to develop a couple of side mysteries for the player to solve along the way, and have the main story follow the same path as the novel. I might throw in a couple of bad ends too if I can think of any. It's not 100% though, I might just have the story play out all the way through without any choices or branching. I'm kind of seeing how it goes.
>Like if your mc had seen him holding a typical speech on tv. Have him say a bunch of platidudes there.
But again maybe you did show that somewhere in there and I simply don't remember.
Yeah, introducing the governor character a little sooner and giving the reader more of an impression of his public side to contrast his private side is one of the details I want to alter.
>There were only a few moments were a rolled my eyes, your main characters how everything is pointless spiel was one.
Part of what I was trying to do with this story was make some commentary on white male isolation, how shitty things look under liberal rule, and how depressing and pointless modernity is most of the time. I didn't want it to be all heavy handed and corny though so I tried to make it lighthearted and humorous most of the time, making the autist character someone who would be sympathetic but also someone you could laugh at a little. Believe it or not I actually rewrote his angstier monologues numerous times because I felt some of them were a bit much, and the version that wound up in the final draft is toned down quite a bit. Maybe it needs a bit more toning. Anyway, the Raymond Chandler novel this is based on, The Long Goodbye,
was sort of the same thing; it was a mystery story that also cPost too long. Click here to view the full text.